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Winterfate
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on 07/17/2012
I'd like to get some feedback for my currently only published article on this site:
http://wizzley.com/facebook-the-anti-social-network/
Essentially, I came up with a short article on why Facebook is an anti-social network. I'd like to know if I got my point across, or did it come off as too long-winded and/or ranty?
I have a habit of dragging when I write, especially when I get writer's block. While I have a bunch of published articles at Hubpages, they're mostly about video games, so writing about social networks is actually a bit of a leap for me.
(I'm hoping I can diversify a bit here without getting yelled at for stretching my content all across the Internet, in terms of topics).
So, tell me what you think! What can I improve?
Thanks for your time! :D
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lobobrandon
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on 07/18/2012
Looks good, but no comments as I've never written about social networks before :) Another point - I'm not that good myself.
However, I'd like to think your products won't make any sales - I doubt people will want to know about Facebook because you're writing about the anti-social aspect. Hence they already know the basics about FB.
You could add some books that give some FB tips n tricks (If they do exist)
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Winterfate
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on 07/18/2012
Hey, a familiar HP face! :D
Thanks for the feedback lobobrandon! I went and tweaked the Amazon capsule a bit. :)
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Sam
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on 07/18/2012
Good article! I would tweak the Amazon capsule a bit further, by moving it up higher and by adding some books that 'rant' about Facebook and other social networks. Ask yourself what a person that reads your article would be inclined to buy? I would also add a module, either Zazzle or Amazon, at the end with some beautiful letter stationary and title it on the lines 'now sit down and write your Mom a REAL letter!'. Just my 2adcents, SY
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lobobrandon
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on 07/18/2012
Oh and your amazon capsule looks bad - HP style :) Try making it a gallery so that it's more prominent. When you edit it choose Gallery in the Layout and then make further modifications till your happy
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dustytoes
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on 07/18/2012
Good article in my opinion. I think a picture in one of the modules might help with the overall look of the page - but I am a picture freak!! Not everyone feels the same.
Welcome, too..!
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Guest
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on 07/18/2012
I just read it and left a comment. I think it's a good article..welcome
Do what makes you happy- I write and create
Hubpages
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Winterfate
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on 07/19/2012
Thanks for all of the help guys! I'm up to my third article now. :)
I'm happy that this is such a warm community. :D
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JoHarrington
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on 07/24/2012
Being a noob myself, I feel a bit dodgy giving out advice in here. That's why I leave it to the veterans.
But I did want to add that I'm really enjoying your gaming articles here. :)
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katiem2
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on 07/24/2012
Looking good Winterfate
Katie McMurray
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