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Krlmagi
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on 06/30/2015

https://wizzley.com/canadian-cooks-aman-dosanj-kelowna-bc/

https://wizzley.com/canada-s-chefs-fan-zhang-toronto-on/

https://wizzley.com/chefs-across-north-america-derek-ronspies-seattle-wa/

https://wizzley.com/canadian-chefs-profiled-nate-catto-fort-mcmurray-ab/

https://wizzley.com/canadian-chefs-profiled-amanda-skidmore-nelson-bc/

 

I am planning on using these to apply for a freelance writing position so I'd love some feedback/copy editing on these articles. Anyone care to oblige? Let me know.

 

 

 

frankbeswick
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on 06/30/2015

I have looked at the Fan Zhang article. It is well written and your knowledge of cookery shows through in your work. i think that you need to draw your ideas together in a conclusion, which was lacking in this work. However, you are a very clear writer. Good luck!


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Krlmagi
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on 07/01/2015

Thank you for the feedback. I'll bear the conclusion in mind!

cazort
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on 08/28/2015

I think these articles would be hugely improved by citing of whatever sources you have for your information.

If you're writing about a chef, the first question that comes to mind is: how do you know this information? Have you researched it, or do you have unique experience that has given you insider information into these chefs?

If you've researched it, then I think it is important to cite the sources that you used to put together your article. This not only makes you look more authoritative, it's useful to readers if they want to read more, and I've found it can also dramatically improve the search ranking of a page.  Google frowns upon copied content, even if it's done through original writing and original research, and if you're getting this info from other published webpages without citing them, I think this can make your page very unlikely to rank--whereas if Google can tell that you're researching a topic, citing the original sources, and then offering your own synthesis or commentary of the material, I think this makes your new page on the topic more likely to rank well in searches for the term.

I've found time and time again that pages of mine that link to relevant external sources, especially when they're the best sources I was able to find on the topic, end up ranking much better than pages that I publish that don't link to any external sites.

If you're sharing your own personal experience that gives you insider info, then I think you need to share more of your story.

Either way, I think this will convey more authority in your writing and make the reader more likely to trust you, which I think will help you get more views for your article in the long-run.

Good luck!


Alex Zorach, editor of RateTea and co-founder of Why This Way
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Krlmagi
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on 08/28/2015

I know this because I've interviewed the chefs. I do an interview with every chef I profile. However, I have gone back in and will continue to go back through my articles and actually point this out. I want to avoid linking directly to the restaurant websites because I don't want to give the impression that I'm writing an endorsement for the restaurant or the chef. The purpose of the profiles is merely to showcase what they do.

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