Critique on Writing Online

Hi fellow Wizzleyites,

I am going to be doing some critiques on Writing Online of three Wizzley articles.  I will pick these based on what I am looking to critique from a list of submitted articles.  These will appear during January on Writing Online to help get us all raring to go during the New Year.  So to get this going, please submit an article that you would like critiqued in this thread.  Only one submission per person, other than that there are no restrictions.  The point of these critiques to help all of us make more money, and learn ways of being more efficient online writers.  No matter whose articles end up getting critiqued, we will all learn from them.

Okay I will step forward - but if others come along feel more than free to do theirs!

The World of Downton Abbey Book

If I do get chosen and as you know I am such a shy, retiring sort be gentle with me

You are welcome to critique any of my articles, but please be gentle with me too!

You need to choose one.  I just do not have the time to look through all of your articles. 

I will join in with this one as well.

http://wizzley.com/the-ultimate-matrix-collection-on-blu-ray/

But you folk can be brutal and honest, I can handle it